Eulah Hugill: i like the second one lol pizza and spaghetti my favorite ! :D
Justin Casten: The second line of the canals one is only 5 syllables.In the first one I'd say 'all' rather than 'in' at the start of the second line. The pasta in your spaghetti doesn't make sense.In the second one I would rearrange the words a bit:Pizza, spaghetti,Pasta, yummy, delicious,Italian foodOr: pasta, yummy and delishFor the second line.Other than that, really, really good.I like your haikus,All the Italian food,I am hungry now...Show more
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